Naraca stands ontop a high mountain in the night with the moon out and big and bright making a blueish white glow and looking at Naraca you see glowing purple eyes glowing in the very moon light as if his eyes were shards of the moon it self staying into a constent glow and he wears a long black coat having a line of gold buttons on the left side of the coat with 2 pockets on the sides withn a good reach and has slight tears on the bottom end of the coat and has a nicely folded colar on the neck of the coat and under there is a silk under armor with the feeling as if it was washed one hundred times and has a heavy muscle shape seen threw the armor almost as if it was a second skin as if Naraca takes good care of himself and is a great fighter based on looks and his face with an avarge looking face with a strong looking yet boyish jaw line with avarage sized ears and the only problem with his face is a scar across the top of the brige of his nose running down to his cheek looking almost like as if his own tear cut his face during a windy night and with a long silky smooth blonde hair almost looking golden with a length down to his waist line touching his black belt keeping his tight black combat pants with a firm grip showing of leg muscle and a slight bulge on the crouch and as Naraca looks into the moon almost as if he was hypnotized by the sheer beauty of something so big and he looks int the moon with a tear running down his face across the memorial scar on his face forever reminding him of his grim past and as Naraca stands there firmily as if he was a soldier in the same room of the president his long back coat sways and moves with the wind as if the were one trying to go away from the evil pace that is the word and his hair sways in a way its a if each hair strand is alive and with a mind of its own it dances to the strong breeze of the wind pushing agaisht his face like 300 celining fans in full blast and with such a beauiful site in the face Naraca he says to himself "if...if i could take it back i would" naraca says as he raises his forearm looking at his open hand and looks at it as if looking into a painting at the art museum then Naraca closes his eyes with the tear droping from his cheek with his jaw twicting with tension and feels an akward pain in his neck "i made that promise but i couldent keep it...but i promise i will fufill your dream" Naraca says with slight fright as if he thnks twice about what he is thinking "i will..." Naraca says as small blue lighting runs threw his fingers then Naraca clenches his fist with tension and very forcefully vains begin to form on his fist "from this day forth i will train more and more to increase my power to achive your dream the one you couldent finsh" Naraca says as he turns around and his blonde swaying hair whips his faces now that the wind blows on his back and he begins to make his way down the moutain

This gets an F. No punctuation (that's a part of grammar; look it up) Misspelled words, Not to mention the fact that your supposed to be practicing your bending. And to top it all off all you really did was ParaRP. Either redo or make this character and find a Master. Or use a canon character or use a Non-Bender.

what does para rp mean and i dont remember the rules saying anything about having to pratice bending as a test but if i must allow me to redo

I said you can take the test over, but read the rules along with the grading scale

http://avatarcentral.heavenforum.com/rules-f58/rules-t31.htm

yeah i know them but have no idea what para rping is mind explining

2nd with tenshi. aload of spelling and gramatical mistakes but the far most thing is you need to add bending into teh rp sample i suggest you look at these. he and tenshi have posted and shown how you rp every bending disiplin in these 2 topics

http://avatarcentral.heavenforum.com/ba-sing-se-f9/avatar-aangs-current-location-t25.htm

http://avatarcentral.heavenforum.com/ba-sing-se-f9/tenshis-air-bending-training-t28.htm

here i'll make another and im useing what i already have and i'll add bending to it dont worry

well then hurry up and do another test, you keep saying your going to but you never do.

Naraca stands ontop a high mountain in the night
with the moon out and big and bright making a blueish white glow and
looking at Naraca you see glowing purple eyes glowing in the very moon
light as if his eyes were shards of the moon it self staying into a
constent glow and he wears a long black coat having a line of gold
buttons on the left side of the coat with 2 pockets on the sides within
a good reach and has slight tears on the bottom end of the coat and has
a nicely folded colar on the neck of the coat and under there is a silk
under armor with the feeling as if it was washed one hundred times and
has a heavy muscle shape seen threw the armor almost as if it was a
second skin as if Naraca takes good care of himself and is a great
fighter based on looks and his face with an avarage looking ears and the only
problem with his face is a scar across the top of the brige of his nose
running down to his cheek looking almost like as if his own tear cut
his face during a windy night and with a long silky smooth white hair
almost looking silver with a length down to his waist line touching his
black belt keeping his tight black combat pants with a firm grip
showing off leg muscle and a slight bulge on the crouch and as Naraca
looks into the moon almost as if he was hypnotized by the sheer beauty
of something so big and he looks into the moon with a tear running down
his face across the memorial scar on his face forever reminding him of
his grim past and as Naraca stands there firmily as if he was a soldier
in the same room of the president his long back coat sways and moves
with the wind as if the were one trying to go away from the evil place
that is the world and his hair sways in a way its as if each hair strand
is alive and with a mind of its own it dances to the strong breeze of
the wind pushing against his face like 300 celining fans in full blast
and with such a beauiful site Naraca forms a stance with his left arm streched out and his right arm close to his chest and his right leg out and his left leg behind him then lightning surrounds his body then i does a 180 turn with hs body and points out 2 fingers and streching out his arm lightning strikes out of his 2 fingers in a straight line and in a perfect stance he spins his body doing a 360 lighting comes out of his body all around him then with haste he opens his palm and streches his arm out a ball of lighting surrounds his hand then 4 strikes of lighting shoot out of the ball and going in the air wildly "thank you at least you manged to teach me how to do this before you died" Naraca said quietly then i jumps up in the air and he does a front flip in the air and with his coat and hair swaying behind him then then slams his foot down on the grassy ground then from the ground a big trail of lighting shoots up from the ground towards the moon then Naraca backflips back to his feet he then puts his 2 hands to his side and from the looks of it he charges a very violent looking ball of lighting and then he thusts his arms forward "AHHH" Naraca yells and a wild beam of lighting shoots from his hands as big as his head it shoots straight forward then Naraca stands normally and lighting surges threw his arms it then forms a barrier of lighting around his arms then he lfts his arm up" NOW COME FORTH" as Naraca says those words a very gaint beam of lighting shots from the sky 3x bigger then his body and it hits his arm and it looks as if he is absorbing the strike then Naraca braces himself by taking a wide stance then he thrusts his arm back then moves it forward and the lighting he absorbed shoots out from his hand going high in the sky with a blowing blue from the lighting truely a sight to see "thank you father"

this any better

20 spelling mistakes by my count using MS word. the rest reads ok but i had to tinker with the paragraphing before it made any sense. i will grade it to a E for now and would be a C if you get the parragraphing and no spelling/grammer mistakes. i suggest u use MS word for your posts lol

ugh im srry my keyboard is broken and some words dont come out right

but regardless if its an E then that means im a bender so can i be moved to fire benders

oh and can i control lighting but only in a begginer level so im not to strong with it

Even though there is no such thing as E grade as the grading scale goes F, D, C, B, A, I do agree that you should get a D with this. You added more detail which is what go you the better grade but you still did not put in any punctuation. Also, there is the matter of the spelling and grammatical errors. You say that your keyboard is broken I don't see how that would effect your ability to spell.

D grade lets you use Beginner level bending...And beginners are not able to use lighting as that is a master level technique. I will however allow you to redirect lightning if you want.

well thats cool i'll take that and by my keyboard being weird its cuz sometimes when i put something down like "Alchemy" it would come out like "lchem" (i had to check the alchemy to get it right cuz what i just showed happend) but i do understand the punctuation part but the grammer is not my fault so in my oppinion i should get a C due to my spelling being right but the keyboard just doesent put down some words really

The no punctuation was the biggest problem, not the spelling. So no, you got a D and that's your final grade. now go make your character and start training with a firebending master in order to become more powerful. Maybe if your lucky Zuko will train you, you can ask but he most likely will say no.